Comic 21 - Gavin

6th Jan 2011, 11:00 PM in Ch 1: The New Girl
Average Rating: 5 (4 votes)
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Jocelyn 6th Jan 2011, 11:00 PM edit delete
Now that I look at it, I wonder if this page was even necessary. I feel like all it really did was draw things out just a wee bit longer. Well, I guess it helps establish that Rudy’s not a complete jerk… hopefully…

I ended up changing the dialogue on this one a few times too. Maria’s final line, in particular, originally stated that she thought Gavin was being “emo” because “on the off-hand chance Rudy was right about Rain, he’d owe her ever more money.” As amusing as I thought that was, Maria did technically deny that bet. Plus, no matter how I worded it, it just never felt natural. So while a little funny, I don’t think I really liked the line at all. “I hope she slaps him” though, seems fitting to me… and is potentially still kinda funny.

Rain, all characters and all other aspects of the story are copyright material belonging to me.
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AliJ5533 7th Jan 2011, 12:00 PM edit delete reply
Hey, now that I've worked out that you update Mondays, Wednesdays and Fridays, I don't care if you drag things out.
Cos its never that long till the next installment lol.

Very odd behaviour, though, from Gavin... I wonder what that's all about.
LauraEss 5th Oct 2011, 12:44 PM edit delete reply
Yes, it WAS needed, because we can see that Gavin is not a jerk
Lex-Kat 31st Oct 2016, 5:43 AM edit delete reply
I liked it. I think it added to both Rudy and Gavin's characters, showing that neither of them are jerks.
Minim 17th Nov 2017, 2:47 AM edit delete reply
Rain doesn't seem the type to slap a fly. Gavin seems rather troubled here...
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