Comic 21 - Gavin

6th Jan 2011, 11:00 PM in Ch 1: The New Girl
Gavin
Average Rating: 5 (4 votes)
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Jocelyn 6th Jan 2011, 11:00 PM edit delete
Jocelyn
Now that I look at it, I wonder if this page was even necessary. I feel like all it really did was draw things out just a wee bit longer. Well, I guess it helps establish that Rudy’s not a complete jerk… hopefully…

I ended up changing the dialogue on this one a few times too. Maria’s final line, in particular, originally stated that she thought Gavin was being “emo” because “on the off-hand chance Rudy was right about Rain, he’d owe her ever more money.” As amusing as I thought that was, Maria did technically deny that bet. Plus, no matter how I worded it, it just never felt natural. So while a little funny, I don’t think I really liked the line at all. “I hope she slaps him” though, seems fitting to me… and is potentially still kinda funny.

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Rain, all characters and all other aspects of the story are copyright material belonging to me.
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AliJ5533 7th Jan 2011, 12:00 PM edit delete reply
AliJ5533
Hey, now that I've worked out that you update Mondays, Wednesdays and Fridays, I don't care if you drag things out.
Cos its never that long till the next installment lol.

Very odd behaviour, though, from Gavin... I wonder what that's all about.
LauraEss 5th Oct 2011, 12:44 PM edit delete reply
LauraEss
Yes, it WAS needed, because we can see that Gavin is not a jerk
Lex-Kat 31st Oct 2016, 5:43 AM edit delete reply
Lex-Kat
I liked it. I think it added to both Rudy and Gavin's characters, showing that neither of them are jerks.
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